ok so you sir have talent, and i applaud you. The only thing though is the voice acting, it's not really that good. I mean maybe I'm off base criticizing you when my voice acting is like 20 times worse than yours, but I really think something like this would be better if you found someone to voice over the cartoon. There are alot of REALLY talented voice actors here, alot of them voice for free. I pretty much agree with twistedgrim though.
I don't know if you are looking for criticism, but that's my take.
You really do have talent though, the way you piece things together, it's actually really well done. I hope you keep animating man, you'll just keep getting better and better. It would be a sad day if you stopped :/. Good luck man.